procrastination

Hesitantly I picked up the pencil

A wave of doubt swept over me

But for my grade it was essential

I’d have fun now and do it later maybe


The clock ticked on, but Istayed still

The tasks piled on, I had no care

The looming deadline became a drill

Then came thrill from urgency, once I was aware


Was it all worth it, maybe just for today.



Broken poem:

Hesitantly

I picked up the pencil


A wave of doubt 

swept over me


But for my grade 

it was essential


I’d have fun now.

And do it later? Maybe


The clock went tick/tick/tick on, 

but I stayed still


The tasks piled on, 

My thoughts scattered but I had no care


The looming deadline 

became a last-minute drill


Then came the thrill from urgency, 

once I was aware


Was it all worth it? Maybe just for today.



In my broken version of the poem, I disrupted the original structure of the poem with more lines, which create a sense of hesitancy and show somewhat of a flow of thoughts. I also added interruptions within some phrases to create a sense of urgency. The way I broke up my poem, echoes Rosal’s idea that breaking patterns bring new energy. The spontaneity added by this fragmented structure is similar to funk music, where the syncopation and groove come from playing off beat.

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